- The introduction related wikileaks to the everyday life of the reader
- Had a clear objective but was not overly structured
Torture
- I wasn't bored while reading this paper
- Used the definition to support their point but didn't say it out front
Women
- Use many specifics and statistics
- Used a ton of credible sources
My Paper
- Make a more capturing intro
- Don't be so obvious that this is a definition paper
- Make it touch the readers lives
- Clear up shady points
- Bring in more points to support my claim
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