Peer Review

             I found the peer review to be very helpful by having others help point out parts of my paper that made sense in my head but did not quite work out in my paper. It also helped me figure out better ways to organize my paper and put like points together. During the peer review, others also brought some of my strange sentences to my attention where I might not have completely finished my point or just it just didn’t sound as good as it could. Sometimes as I write I do not realize a sentence sounds awkward and then I skip over it in proof reading because I understand what I meant. Most of the feedback I received made a lot of sense once the ideas were brought up. It helped having a couple different people listening to the feedback in case it was wrong.

                After peer review I applied many suggestions to my paper. For example I changed my introduction from forwardly disagreeing with Cringely to just explaining his stance and pointing out the flaws in his argument. I also took out a quote from one paragraph that seemed out of place once it was brought to my attention. I then changed many of my awkward sentences. For example I changed “Facebook is becoming less private because that is what the social norm is becoming” to “Facebook is becoming less private to keep up with social norms”.

                I really feel like I am becoming better at proof reading my papers and others papers. I now know not to focus so much on little things before I get the main points of my paper organized. For example, I know not to worry about commas before if my argument doesn’t make sense.